06/13/2007

While the basic information is present in this letter, it is not organized effectively. Also, it  doesn't sell  readers on the improvements. It lacks sufficient detail. Readers should  be excited about these changes, but there is very little reason for such enthusiasm. Finally, the letter is marred by some awkward and wordy phrasing.

Causeway Apartments
489 Ridgelake Drive. Unnecessary period
Metairie, LA 70001
(504) 836-3947 

15 April 2004 

Jacob Smith
Causeway Apartments
489 Ridgelake Drive, Apt. #31
Metairie, LA 70001 

Dear Mr. Smith 

This letter is to inform you of the rent increase.  The increase will be $40 a month. 

Yes, the increase is also for current residents renewing their lease.  The reason for the rise in rent is the additions to Causeway Apartments. The improvements will consist the following: 

• Tennis Court

• Basketball Court

• New Weight Room 

• New Computeres spelling error

The increase, however, will not take place until the new lease begins on August 15, 2004.  The construction for these improvements will start on September 1, 2004. If there are any questions concerning the increase, please contact the office at (504) 836-3947.  We are excited about the new improvements and look forward to an enjoyable upcoming year.

Thanks, 

Donald Duk
Apartment Manager
(504) 836-3946